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“River to the right. Pink triangle mansion on the left… at one point, one of mum’s great aunties or uncles owned that house.” – I really enjoy the accumulative imagery in this paragraph; there is also a sense of stream-of-consciousness in this section that is very affective, the notion of sitting in the car passing by these familiar spots, ticking them off the checklist of your fondest memories. Very evocative! ”A place completely entwined in rich memories” – This concluding sentence really embraces the naturalistic imagery employed throughout your entire piece, as I imagine ‘entwined’ with your memories are the branches of ‘towering trees’ and ‘shoreline vegetation’. The emotive language is completely nostalgic and wistful, full of longing and a deep appreciation for Wolli Beach. This makes me want to go there one day, awesome creative!
Mariama E. Biro Saibou 