Peer Review 4 – Cameron Cole’s ‘A Letter to Patrick White’


Hi Cameron,
I think it’s safe to say that Patrick White would be beaming from the praise you have voiced for his work. I agree that White indeed leaves readers awestruck by his “story-telling ability”. You clearly have a grasp on White’s skill in creating depth and vividness within the minimalism of both his worlds and words. Recognising that the quote “He had the paprika chicken in his teeth” is a concise, yet emotive description of the disgusting Szabo indicates you understand not only the way in which White crafts his literature, but you can also discern the meaningful complexity shrouded by the simplicity of language. Both an eloquent and succinct letter to Mr White; the kind of writing I imagine he’d enjoy! Well done 😊

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Peer Review 3 – Ashureena Dankha’s ‘Art and Literature’

Ashureena’s Entry 3 Blog Post:

My first thought: what an unusual way to begin a critical piece…

Though this is a critical, I really appreciated the fusion of creative and critical you embedded at the beginning of your blog: “I am standing on a footbridge made of timber, a boardwalk if you maybeyond that surface, are the ocean’s gentle waves, conversing with the wind.” That excerpt displays beautiful auditory imagery and it is wonderful way to set the scene for your reader: to exemplify the “correlation between literature and art” with your own words.

This imaginative paragraph proves the very point you make in the rest of your blog. Like literature and art, creativity and criticism are often the same thing and must be used interchangeably to evoke an agenda or reveal a perspective to audiences. I very much agree that art facilitates self-actualisation and referencing Miles Franklin and Banksy as authoress and artist both creating pieces in opposition of the status quo was a clever way of evidencing creatives from classical and contemporary Australian periods.

My last thought: what a brilliant way to illustrate the connection between literature and art!

Peer Review 2 – Holly Ibrahim’s ‘Description of First-class Marksman’

A profound, analytical interpretation of Nolan’s romanticised ideation pertaining to Ned Kelly. Your acknowledgment of the various perspectives that artists and institutions held about Ned Kelly as either a hero or a criminal appropriately contextualised your description. I found “a brutal collision of a man characterised by his reputation of violence and the peaceful Australian scenery” to be a particularly effective way of communicating the contrast that exists between the beauty of Australia and the obscurity of the Ned Kelly legend. The way you describe Nolan’s portrayal of Ned Kelly as a “cartoon-like image” is also clever, as I’m lead to imagine there’s a whimsical and childlike element to this artwork, embodying the idealistic notion of Ned Kelly as the ‘Australian Legend’, embedded throughout our Australian identity. An articulate, succinct description of “Frist-class Marksman” – interesting and informative blog, Holly!


Peer Review 1 – Alyssa Seccull’s ‘Wooli Beach’

River to the right. Pink triangle mansion on the left… at one point, one of mum’s great aunties or uncles owned that house.” – I really enjoy the accumulative imagery in this paragraph; there is also a sense of stream-of-consciousness in this section that is very affective, the notion of sitting in the car passing by these familiar spots, ticking them off the checklist of your fondest memories. Very evocative! ”A place completely entwined in rich memories” – This concluding sentence really embraces the naturalistic imagery employed throughout your entire piece, as I imagine ‘entwined’ with your memories are the branches of ‘towering trees’ and ‘shoreline vegetation’. The emotive language is completely nostalgic and wistful, full of longing and a deep appreciation for Wolli Beach. This makes me want to go there one day, awesome creative!